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It lacks structure

The main thing with this is that it lacks structure and sounds like random notes. You've got the sounds and skills needed to make it much better. Try having the bass play the roots of a chord progression and add a pad or something playing the full chords, then write a melody based off of the chords. It can be as simple as going up and down the scale.

TehRave responds:

Ah yes I understand, but basically the structure of the song is scaling the melody up and down. In another song I will take everything you've said into account though.

Thanks for the review

that's weird

At the end of the vocal you feel like that guy just gave some awesome speech about how great america is.
Wait... what

Anyway, like everyone else is saying, it's great. My favorite part is from around 1:00 to 2:40, that melody is awesome. Good job with that

Is that...

Is that FL slayer I hear?

I like it though. What the dude below me said ^.^

I like it

It feels like the kind of music that could be playing in the background of some FPS. If that's what you were going for then you nailed it.

Windows98 responds:

Thanks :)
I hope it does get used!

I think I know the reason it sounds bad

Try backing down on detuning those synths. It would sound a lot better if it was in tune. Generally you don't have to worry about tuning with electronic music, but yeah...
If it felt in tune I'd give it an 8 or 9

Kewl.

In short, the beginning part was awesome but the rest of the song doesn't quite live up to it. I love those chords in the pad you used, and combining it with that clap and hihat sounds great. I don't quite get the shift/control thing, but it sounds cool haha.
Once it quieted down, I kept waiting for it to come out into a big hit with maybe a tempo increase. It did change, but it took too long. The last part needs a little work I think, you did imply that this was a work in progress so I think you should add a lead synth in there carrying a melody. And instead of having it build for a couple bars then go back down a few times, the whole thing should be building the whole time up until where the song ends now. And then for that ending you're talking about... I don't know haha just make it sound cool, you clearly have the skill.

So I probably over-did that. But I'm really hearing a lot of cool stuff in this, and I'd like to hear it when you've put that ending on it. Shoot me a PM when you finish it :D

totojimbob responds:

Thanks for the review : )
Thanks for the advice, I might shorten the middle part. The majority of work I've got left to do on this is the lead synth at the end. I really like the -pause-kick- section, but I need to look to add a melody from there. I'll be sure to shoot you a PM if I ever get this finished, as I have an awful of leaving works in progress unfinished. Once again, thanks for taking the time to review, it means a lot.
--totojimbob

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orlandobloomington responds:

your a fucking retard

Pretty cool sounding

I like the dark feel throughout the whole thing, but I think it could use more of a melody line throughout, because of it being an anthem.

Nice little song

The intro was a little too long for me, being what it is. Other than that, it was simple-simply relaxing =) It's just a pleasurable listening experience XP

Tysuru responds:

Intro was almost half the song, so I dont blame you. But thank you =]

Sounds great

Definitely continue this. It sounds great, like one of those "story songs" that progress like a story. The only thing I would change is the reverb on the piano, the way it echoes with the beat like that makes it sound unrealistic. Not saying take it off altogether just turn down the reverb volume a little.

fizhbone responds:

Yeah man thanx :) but its called a Dream Piano that Plugin i used, and its the hole idea, but i will try to turn it down a bit, c what i get out of that thanx !

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